This morning Saturday,i woke up in my brown flower embodied bed covers , to the smell of crispy waffles just the way that like them. I got up ,jumped out of bed and slipped on my pink bunny shaped slippers and slowly walked down the stairs towards the Delicious smell waffles.
My mom standing there pouring that batter in and waiting to take them out. Wow when i looked at those waffles the looked perfect. in a heart shaped design with syrup dripping down the sides,the square shaped chunks of butter starts to melt and run along the side of the waffle with syrup.
She smell of the unbelivible and fantastic the waffles waffles just relaxes me i reach for the stainless steel fork and knife and start of eating those Delicious freshly picked strawberry's out of my garden. dipped in the chocolaty tasting whipped cream mmmmmmmmmmm yummy looks so deliciose.
My favorit breakfast morning drink that freshly squised orange juice brightly colored orange darker then the coloures in the rainbow. When i put my fork into the waffles it makes a deliciouse crunchy noise like the crunch of a candy bar but in such a better version.
(oh my ghoodness just writing this leaves me craving waffles)
good story i liked your discrption but try to work on the structure of your sentances.
ReplyDeletegood story i liked your discrption but try to work on the structure of your sentances.
ReplyDeletei liked it too, you used plenty of good details for your story, but i think you could have worked on it a little more.
ReplyDeletegood job!
ver good
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it was very discritive about everything.
I really like it :) your description was great and you used very good words thing only thing i could think of working on it your sentances
ReplyDeletei really like your story you used lots of good words and it was very descriptive
ReplyDeleteone thing you could work on is your sentences
-lots of descripitve words
ReplyDelete-very good descrbing words
-you could work on your sentences
thx poeple it made me hungry writing it!!
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